Scripts for One Page IAT Comic Strips
© 2007 by Oblimo
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Episode One
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Episode Two
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Episode Three
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Episode Four
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Episode Five
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Back to the Workshop
Layout Notes: We currently envision IAT presented in
slide panels. A "slide panel" is one web-comic panel (800x350 pixels
is the size we started working with, but you never know). Slide panels are
presented in a slide-show format, one at a time to the viewer. A
"sub-panel" is a subdivision of a slide panel. When I think a scene
could appear by itself, I'll use the term "slide panel" to title the
scene. When I think two or three scenes could be depicted in the same slide,
I'll use the format "Slide Panel [number], Sub-Panel [letter]."
EPISODE ONE:
"WRITE WHAT YOU KNOW"
Slide Panel 1
MIDDLE SHOT of DEITER DETWILER sitting at his computer desk
in his bedroom, typing on the keyboard. He is fully clothed. The captions in
this panel are DEITER's type-written words. I suggest making the caption boxes
reminiscent of computer screens.
CAPTION
Dee's
Blog, First Entry: They say keeping a journal helps writers come up with
ideas. But what do I have that's worth blogging? I'm Deiter Detwiler. I'm a
computer nerd and comic book geek. I write Internet porn. None of that is
special these days.
Slide Panel 2
This panel can be narrower than the others. It is a TIGHT
SHOT of DEITER's computer monitor and keyboard. We see DEITER's hands typing on
the keyboard.
COMPUTER SCREEN
Dee's
Blog, Second Entry: I think I have something to write about now.
Slide Panel 3
WIDE SHOT of DEITER sitting at his computer desk in his
bedroom. POV of shot is from the monitor on his desk: he is FACING THE VIEWER,
so we do not see his computer, but we see him sitting in his desk chair, and he
is illuminated by the glow of the computer's monitor (OFF PANEL). DEITER is
sitting back, looking at the OFF PANEL monitor, bemused and a little
bewildered. He is shirtless. DEITER's lap and legs are BELOW PANEL.
Two LIME GREEN GIRLS, both personas of GALATEA, have moved
into the panel. GRUMPY GALATEA is standing behind DEITER, arms folded, eyebrow
arched and lips pouting, glaring at the viewer and the OFF PANEL monitor.
LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA is pressed against his side, arms around him, whispering in
his ear. (All GALATEA personas should bare striking resemblances to one
another, like sisters, but should have different expressions and physical
traits defining their personas.) They are also illuminated by the OFF PANEL
glowing monitor, and they are semi-transparent, so have fun with that!
GRUMPY GALATEA
You think?
LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA
Understatement of
the year, bright boy.
Slide Panel 4
Same shot as Panel 3. Same expression on DEITER's face.
GRUMPY GALATEA and LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA are looking down toward his lap. PARTY
GALATEA, her bimbo persona, has been sitting beneath the desk and between his
legs (OFF PANEL), apparently giving DEITER a blowjob. She has poked her head up to look over
her shoulder toward the viewer. She looks curious, doe-eyed, and innocent.
PARTY GALATEA
Huh?
EPISODE TWO:
"KNOW WHAT YOU WANT"
Slide Panel 1
Panel is blank save for LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA's face, peering
in from one side of the panel. She is looking out at viewer.
LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA
I don't get it, Dee. How can you and I conquer the world if no one really knows
who we are?
DEITER (OFF PANEL)
Villains
want to conquer the world, Galatea. Heroes want to stop them.
CAPTION
Dee's
Blog: I want to write about Galatea.
Slide Panel 2
WIDE SHOT, no background. PARTY GALATEA's face peers in from
the side of the panel opposite LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA, who is now looking at her.
PARTY GALATEA
Since when?
DEITER (OFF PANEL)
These things
change. You've got a few hundred years to catch up on.
CAPTION
She is my best
friend. The love of my life. I want to tell you all about it.
Slide Panel 3
Suggest using Panel 2 as background for Panel 3. PARTY
GALATEA and LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA are now out-of-focus. Center of panel is
dominated by CLOSE UP of GRUMPY GALATEA's face, as if she has loomed suddenly
out of nowhere. She is looking out at the viewer. Her face is upside down.
GRUMPY GALATEA
Fine.
DEITER (OFF PANEL)
Gah!
GRUMPY GALATEA
We'll have secret
identities. But I still don't see what that’s got to do with this.
Slide Panel 4
REVEAL: DEITER's crowded bed. GRUMPY, LOVEY-DOVEY, and PARTY
GALATEA are surrounding DEITER, looking down at him. LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA seems
particularly interested in his crotch. (PG-13, if you please. I suggest a
strategically placed bed sheet or pillow.)
DEITER
I can't fight crime
until you let me put on some clothes.
LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA
Why not? No one
will look at your face, I can guarantee you that.
CAPTION
But our love
life is a little…complex.
DEITER
Are there any more
of you under the bed?
EPISODE THREE:
"WANT WHAT YOU ALREADY GOT"
Slide Panel 1
Interior of DEITER'S LIVING ROOM. MIDDLE SHOT of the living
room couch. PARTY GALATEA sits at one end of the couch, blowing bubbles through
a bubble wand, holding a bottle of bubble fluid in her free hand. LOVEY-DOVEY
GALATEA sits at the other end of the couch, pointing a remote control at an
OFF-PANEL television.
FX (BUBBLES)
pop pop pop
FX (REMOTE)
Click!
Slide Panel 2
Same shot. PARTY GALATEA has put the wand aside and pouring
the bubble fluid into her mouth. LOVEY-DOVEY has not noticed. She's frowning at
the OFF-PANEL television.
FX (PARTY GALATEA)
glup glip glup
FX (REMOTE)
Click!
Slide Panel Three
Same shot. PARTY GALATEA is snuggled up to LOVEY-DOVEY
GALATEA's side. PARTY has her mouth pressed over one of LOVEY-DOVEY's ears and
is blowing into it hard enough to make PARTY's cheeks puff out. LOVEY-DOVEY
sits in shocked, wide-eyed silence. LOVEY-DOVEY's hand slowly squeezes the
remote. Bubbles are floating out of LOVEY-DOVEY's ear on the other side of her
head.
FX (BUBBLES)
pop pop pop POP!
FX (REMOTE)
Cllllick…
Slide Panel Four
Angled, overhead shot of couch. LOVEY-DOVEY has pinned PARTY
down and is tickling her without mercy. PARTY is laughing hard but silent soap
bubbles zoom out of her mouth instead of laughter. LOVEY-DOVEY's hair has
stretched into tentacles to help with the tickling. One hair-tentacle holds the
remote.
FX (REMOTE)
clickclickclickclick
Slide Panel Five
Same shot. GRUMPY GALATEA is OFF-PANEL, but her shadow has
fallen over PARTY and LOVEY-DOVEY. PARTY and LOVEY-DOVEY look up at her,
curious but not afraid. A few soap bubbles linger in the air.
FX (BUBBLE)
pop
Slide Panel Six
Back to Panel 1 shot. GRUMPY GALATEA sits alone in the
middle of the couch, looking smug. She pats her newly rounded tummy with one
hand, works the television remote control with the other, and blows a steady
stream of soap bubbles from her mouth.
FX (REMOTE)
click
FX (BUBBLES)
pop pop pop
EPISODE FOUR:
"GOT TO GET—WAIT. WHAT?"
Slide Panel 1
Interior of SRU MEDICAL SUPPLY. MIDDLE SHOT of the store
counter. TOMOE sits near the cash register, looking out at the viewer, smiling
like the Mona Lisa. SB, a rose-colored, diamond-eyed STRAWBERRY BANANA JELLO
GIRL with cotton candy dreadlocks for hair, sits behind the counter further
down from TOMOE. SB is reading an automotive magazine and slurping on a
milkshake.
FX
SLRRRUP
Slide Panel 2
Same shot as Panel 1. SB holds the milkshake in one hand,
straw still in her mouth, as she flips through the magazine with the other
hand. TOMOE is a fourth-wall breaking character who can talk to narrative
captions. These narrative captions should be different than the captions for
DEITER's blog.
CAPTION
I don't know why you want to be
introduced now, Tomoe.
TOMOE
I'm bored.
CAPTION
That's my point. You're not doing
anything funny or sexy, and you're not saying anything that develops the story.
FX
Flip!
Slide Panel 3
Same shot. Tomoe looks sidelong at SB, who just reads the
magazine and takes another slurp of milkshake.
FX (SB)
SLRRRUP
Slide Panel 4
Same shot. Tomoe points across her chest to SB. Her
expression is very matter-of-fact. SB is doing a massive spit-take all over her
magazine.
TOMOE
She's got a huge dick.
FX (SB)
PFFBBLT!
CAPTION
Please tell me that's vanilla ice
cream.
EPISODE FIVE
Slide Panel 1
Sub-Panel A
CLOSE UP of LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA. Her smile is sly. She is
tracing her thumb around her neck, drawing a line in her neck like a collar. I
suggest making it an action shot, so the line is currently only half-way across
her neck or so.
Slide Panel 1
Sub-Panel B
CLOSE UP of LOVEY's hands. She is tracing the thumb of one
hand over the top of the other wrist, drawing a line like a bracelet. The
working hand already has a line traced over its wrist.
Slide Panel 2
WIDE SHOT of LOVEY, stark naked, hopping across the panel,
left to right, trying to keep her balance as she traces a line around one
ankle, and then another, like ankle-bracelets. Suggest making it an action
shot, with LOVEY drawn in a different position across the panel after each hop.
FX (LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA)
Hop Hop Hop
Slide Panel 3
LOVEY stands proudly in the center of the panel. Thanks to the
rings around her neck, wrists, and ankles, she looks like she's wearing the
world's tightest spandex bodysuit. DEITER, shirtless but wearing sweatpants,
wows at her.
LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA
Ta-dah! Instant superhero
costume. Everyone will think I'm wearing spandex.
DEITER
But I'll know you're still naked.
Slide
Panel 4
LOVEY has turned around to treat DEITER and the viewer to a
fan-service (spandex-y) butt shot. She's throwing a wicked grin at DEITER over
her shoulder.
LOVEY-DOVEY GALATEA
Yep.
DEITER
…
DEITER
I love you.
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